Talk:Fan Fic A New Visit from outer Space - Semerone/@comment-30866325-20170105223116

So far, this fan fic is doing great at representing Akira/Goki and your original character. I think that Red has a lot in common with Zenki, but I don't want to spoil the fun for the other readers.

Also, the whole encounter between Akira/Goki and Red is a rather brutal battle of wits. Ugh... Especially chapter 3 is rather harsh with Akira/Goki as Red practically has him by the balls. The only options she leaves him are either to surrender and hope that everything will go alright or make a slight mistake and be forced to fight an extremely threatening foe. That's a really tight spot, there.

I mean I have already read your other fan fic, so in theory Akira/Goki could just catch Red by using his Heavenly Shield, but I guess this incarnation of myself doesn't know that, yet, as the other Akira/Goki from the other entry in the series just figured it out by sheer luck.

I like the challenge Red presents to Akira/Goki. She is an extremely intelligent and emotional character, but she is also a bit shy, so she is pretty much an equal match for him.

Well... I mean at least in wits. I don't know how powerful you will make her in the future, so... Yeah... I can't wait to read chapter 4 and onwards once you translate and publish them!